This material/text should not be quoted; it should be rewritten in your own words (paraphrasing). Click here for more information.
It is not clear from your paraphrasing what the original idea was. Click here for more information
Your attempts at paraphrasing makes your writing/sentence unclear. See: Writing an effective paraphrase
This is not really a paraphrase. This is called plagiaphrasing because you have-
b. only made minor grammar changes to the text info sheet on mechanics of paraphrasing. See: Writing an effective paraphrase
Paraphrase rather than quote here. See: Paraphrasing, summarising and quoting
Instead of using quotations in your writing, paraphrase as much as possible. Using your own words will help you better analyse the information. Just make sure you acknowledge the source. Go to: Writing an effective paraphrase